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Title: Deep Emotion
Description: Remembering feelings


Vita nelleStelle - September 17, 2005 07:46 PM (GMT)
I took all the pain and criticism
Just to see that smile
It’s like I felt it was all worth while
Your rude words
For your wonderful smile
Doesn`t sound like a fair trade anymore
The day you disappeared
I got over you
The day I saw you again
Brought yet that same smile to my face
That same smile to your face
You do not like me at all
For reasons I do not know
But I do not like you either
I ignored the truth before
Trying to trick myself to think there was such a chance
But no not because you are better then me
But because all your qualities repel me
I saw you with some girl
You saw me
We saw each other
I did not smile
Nor did you
There was an awkward tension
You could cut a knife though
My blank starry look of deep thought
Deep emotion
Then I felt frozen inside
Wanting to cry
But not thinking of it or doing it
Ignoring all feelings
Feeling numb
Practically shaking
Unsure of myself
Unsure of my body
Unsure of my thoughts
Frozen in time
I`ve never been with out thought
Aware of one thing
Everything of you
Wanting but to forget
All my past passions
My desires that all led to hurt
Exactly where to draw the line
Nor how to prevent it at all
Never been loved
Always loving
Always leading to hate
Change my everything
Change these things about me
I have tried
And have not succeed
Maybe I need an outside opinion

September - September 18, 2005 03:22 AM (GMT)
Hmmm, interesting. It was good. Did it come from real life experience?

Vita nelleStelle - September 18, 2005 03:16 PM (GMT)
yeah

September - September 18, 2005 07:48 PM (GMT)
Well I liked it! :D

Vita nelleStelle - September 19, 2005 10:22 PM (GMT)
thanks :)

Marzipan - September 21, 2005 09:11 AM (GMT)
I liked it too. Nice work. Welcome to the forum!

Vita nelleStelle - September 25, 2005 02:41 AM (GMT)
thanks




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