The Valley of Gold
Slimy as lotion
A spectacular meeting
Fate was put in motion

A cunning parent
Pushing one toward the light
Toward the riches and the power
Toward the red star who shone bright

The girl was thought too stupid
To know what was in store
A lifetime of torment
Her name: the court whore

The girl was not stupid
She knew exactly how to play
Yes it was man’s game
But she knew the way

She carved a path to his heart
Abstaining from love
Putting the past behind her
Holding her head above

The rumors and the whispers
Saying she had bewitched
But she knew the truth
The court was her niche

She was clever
She was bright
In many ways
An almighty light

Leading them away
From a religion gone sour
Taking the men gone bad
Out of their power

Living life true
A crow who didn’t caw
A crown on her head
The head in the straw
A red haired baby
Crying out for her mom
But the only one there
Echoed her call

And as for the king
They say he didn’t care
But he really did love her
His dark who was fair

She had enchanted him
Right from the start
Her wit was just right
There was never a wart

Yet something had missed
Her attitude had gone wrong
And all that she built
Began to fall

She had created a court
Gay and merry
She had created a king
And the Sun was her baby

So what ever happened
To Queen Anne Boleyn?
Her head was sliced off
Because the smart never win

Wow. I loved how you transformed a modern societal image into a 1800 victorian feel. However, I feel as though the end began to loose emotion. The beginning started out strong, but it was a though the ending became a little void. Try and think of a way to stay strong throughout the entire thing. Good Job Though.

it was really good, strong content.

i just thought that sometimes you lost the feel of the language and it became a little too modern-colloquial. but not that much.