Hey, I'm new and this is my first post, this is just the beginning of my story. Tell me if you like it or not.
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Victoria hugged herself tightly as the cold night’s air lightly kissed her cheeks.
She slowly walked toward the large black steel gates that guarded the departed.
She inched her hand toward the tiny handle and, it slowly creaked open, as if silently inviting her in. Gazing out into the peaceful night sky she eyed the full moon illuminating the deserted graveyard, following the pathway to her father’s grave.
Carefully releasing a delicate red rose from the warmth of her hooded jacket she placed it on his large tombstone. It read here lies a wonderful husband, father, and friend Alex Conway, his love will never be forgotten. Tears drops started to fall from her eyes as guilt weighed down her heart. She fell to her knees and heaved

“Dad I never even got to say goodbye”

“I never told you I loved you”

She sobbed uncontrollably shaking, When she finally ceased she laid against his stone catching him up

"Mom is not the same without you," she mumbled

"She barely eats any thing at all"

"Were falling apart"

"I don’t know what to do"

She gazed down at her watch, it read 12:00

"I better get home... you know how mom worries."

"Good night dad, I love you."

Standing up slowly she brushed all of the accumulated dirt off her jeans.
A gust of wind shirked as it blew the leaves across the grass and the sound of twigs, were snapping.Curious she looked up and gasped holding her hand over her mouth, a scream almost escaping.Her erratic heart was beating wildly against her chest, she breathed in hard feeling as though the wind was knocked out of her.
The tiny hairs on the back of her neck were standing. There was a shadow in the distance advancing with every step closer… closer…closer.
she slowly backed away her gaze on the shadow. A rush of the forceful wind blew of the hood of her jacket, long dark chestnut hair cascading around her tiny waist.

“s…s…s… stay a way from me” she sputtered continuously backing away

He proceeded to advance rapidly unconcerned for her efforts of caution, her heart dropped to her stomach.She was now pinned up against a tree his height towering over her, with no chance of escape.The owl in the tree sensing danger cooed louder with increasing alarm. She was certain; the end was near, the bright light in the distance drawing her closer.The moons light shone brightly, exposing his face for her speculation, all the gods would grow green with envy just with one glance. His face was flawless, carved by the hand of a skillful artist. Piercing gray eyes bore on her face, they reminded her of treacherous clouds before a long storm.


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Happy Holidays.

Wow. You have to keep going!
I really like your style of writing; that's what kept me reading, as well as the fact that I want to see what happens next ^^.
I got myself really confused when you stopped putting your periods after each sentence, so punctuation would help a lot.

wow! that's all i can say. wow! it's sooooo good! i love your style of writing! keep writing PLEASE! i wanna read it! it's really good! kudos! :D