I was really upset and it just popped out. I might enter it in a contest, I haven't decided if it's good enough yet. Tell me what you think!


Why can't you just
Be proud
Of who I am
Instead
Of being proud
Of who you think
I should
Be

Why can't you just
Accept
That I'm not her
Admit
That I'm not a
Perfect daughter
In any
Way

Why do I have
To feel
Like I'll never
Belong
To the same world
That you
Do

Why can't I just
Be me
Instead of a
Replica
Of someone else
I want to stop
Being
Her

Why do I have
To pretend
That I'm who you
Want me
To be when I'm
Just not that girl
I'll never
Be

Why is my life
Put on
Hold while theirs aren't
My stuff
Is considered
Unimportant
Nothing
Good

Why is my stuff
Not good
When she has none
She just
Has a problem
Men together
But I'm
Out

Why am I the
Outsider
On this happy
Home, I
Was here first, right
Why am I the
Jagged
Edge

It sounds good to me! You give out the idea through the words really well.
I thought it was good.

I like it, especially the whole idea... except I think "stuff" sounds sort of clumsy. Also, there might be a little more metaphor and imagery that you could fit into here... but very nice. :)

i agree wholeheartedly with siena.

it makes a nice, natural, relateable song, but more images, not just telling could be fit in, more original phrases.

i also agree that stuff seems out of place.

so yeah.

but it's definitely good, i especially like the last verse =D