My father is an amazing man... seen a lot, knows a lot, wise and true in heart....yet can be harsh and sometimes it's hard to remember he loves me. I'm always learning new things about him and finding out his stories and the way he really feels. Anyway, I wrote this song to help us both. Do you think it might affect him?


Down your cheeks they come
And then fall into my hands
Secret after secret
All your stories never end
Each one tucked away
Beneath the shining in your eyes
Years upon long years
Until now, as at last you cry

I'm listening, I'm trying very hard to understand
'Cause you've traveled roads that I have never known
But there's just no way I could let go of your hand
You're my life, you're my one, you're my home

All the silences
All the faces, all the words
Weighed upon my heart
More and more, 'til I was hurt
But your love is there
Doesn't matter what you say
I'm lifted by its strength
As all the hurt softly falls away

It's time that I thanked you since you've pushed me forth so far
On a long rocky climb up a mountain all my own
I'll look back upon you with love in my heart
For you'll still be my one and my home...
You're my one, my sweet one, and you're my home.

It sounds pretty good! In the last two sentences, is it part of the song to have home said twice? Or is it meant to have a rhyming word but you couldn't think of anything that rhymed with home? Sorry I don't know how to explain what I'm asking. Anyways, I think its pretty good!

wow, that was excellent! its quite a flawless piece of work, i think it could make an great song, in fact, im singing it right now! lol!

Thanks for the replies! I love feedback.

To respond to your question--in songwriting I like to use repetition, so that's why I put "home" in the last stanza twice. I think the way it's sung, it sounds a little more natural. (Sure wish we could post MP3s here ^_^ ) Thanks for asking.