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Title: My life
Description: Is it really what I think it is?


Maya010 - August 1, 2006 11:24 PM (GMT)
As the wind blows through my hair, I lose sight of whats really there
It used to seem so clear, but now it's just a blurr
In fiction it could be real, but through my eyes it seems ideal
Everywhere I go, it always seems to follow

As the rain crashes down, my life flashes before me
projecting every dream, creating my life story
It hits me like a brick and it seems so tough to fix,
the life I once imagined has no real benefit

As the warmth of your hand creates sweat between our palms,
I watch outside my body as our love life dissolves
Do you love me the way you use to,or
are you ready to leave my side,
do you want every part of me,
give me answers, don't give me lies

As reality appears in front of me, there is no life for me,
should I go with the flow, or do just what I see,
behold the life I live, and live the life I behold,
oneday I'll leave this life, and with life, I'll be done

gossipgirl - August 2, 2006 11:27 AM (GMT)
its nice and deep, i like how the story unfolds. however, a few errors: its sight, not site. its used to not use to. onedays hould be one day.

also, i find the rain crashing down part to be a little cliche.




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