View Full Version: "He told Me"

Young Writers Club > Poetry & Song Writing > "He told Me"



Title: "He told Me"
Description: Poem


Maya010 - July 31, 2006 09:44 PM (GMT)
He told me that day he loved me and wouldn't give me up,
but then he found some other love, so now I'm out of luck.
He told me I would do it, if I really loved him truely.
He said it'd be worth my while and he would make me smile.
He tried to romance me, holding hands with me, but there
was more to his secret fantasy.
I told him no that wasn't my flow and then he got angry and mad.
So sad he left me for something else, but I have no need to cry,
if he can't except the way I am, then a virgin I'll have to die.
My morals mean something to me, not kissing and hugging,
I'll do that when I feel the need,
right now I'm okay with who I am, I'll live with my self-esteem.
He told me to grow up, everyone's doing it, that is all that's hip,
but if someone told you to jump off a cliff, would you go and fall to
your death? :rolleyes:

gossipgirl - August 1, 2006 10:54 AM (GMT)
they rhyming is a little...off sometimes but i really liked it otherwise.

Maya010 - August 1, 2006 11:06 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (gossipgirl @ Aug 1 2006, 10:54 AM)
they rhyming is a little...off sometimes but i really liked it otherwise.

Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to fix that the next time. :D

Cheesecake - August 1, 2006 11:18 PM (GMT)
I like it a lot, it has a great message.

Maya010 - August 1, 2006 11:26 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Cheesecake @ Aug 1 2006, 11:18 PM)
I like it a lot, it has a great message.

thanks a lot, one of my reasons for writing this poem was to send a message to others girls in that kinds of situation. I really glad you like it! :D




Hosted for free by InvisionFree