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Title: I remember
Description: mentions anorexia, bulimia, and slutty


lakegurl93 - June 15, 2006 02:40 AM (GMT)
I Remember.

Do you remember a time,
when teacher's pets were popular
and bad kids were frowned on?
When people actually liked their friends,
and fights were forgotten after five minutes?

I remember.

Do you remember a time,
when there were nice people on the street,
ones who smiled and waved,
or even gave the occasional "Hey, how are you doing today?"?

I remember.

Do you remember a time,
when good was good,
and bad was bad?
When the evil guy was defeated by the good guy,
and that put the world at peace?

I remember.

Do you remember a time,
When hot still ment warm,
and slutty wasn't attractive.
When people ate three square meals a day,
plus ice cream?

I remember.

I remember,
do you?

gossipgirl - June 15, 2006 05:41 AM (GMT)
ok...i liked this. has a very colloquial feel to it.

however, change the first stanza, i think. not very engaging. other than that... good.

lakegurl93 - June 15, 2006 07:06 AM (GMT)
I switched around the order. What do you think?

gossipgirl - June 16, 2006 04:10 AM (GMT)
much better, i really like it alot now.

September - June 16, 2006 05:08 PM (GMT)
This is by far my favorite poem ever submitted here.

lakegurl93 - June 16, 2006 10:20 PM (GMT)
Thanks Marie!!

September, that is sooooo sweet!! Thank you soooo much!




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