Falsify

Have you seen my happy face?
I need to put it on
To hide the pain and sorrow,
Something others must not see.
I hide behind this mask
Though something isn’t right.
My world is collapsing,
Shattering, destroyed.
I hide behind this mask
To block the ceaseless tears.
I hide behind this mask
To prove that nothing’s wrong,
When inside I’m really quaking,
Defeated, destroyed.

Thanks, and please be honest. I'm starting to not believe what other people are saying about my poetry. I think I'm the only person in town who actually is really into poetry, so I don't have anyone else's stuff to compare it to.

Well, I really liked it. It had nice flow. Just keep on practicing, cuz as someone told me there is always room for improvement in poetry/songwriting. What you have here is a really good poem. Now, let it sit and you never know what might come out of it. Just keep on revising, adding, rearranging and it'll just get even better. Good job :)

Actually, this is an older poem.
I think it's been my peak for a while.

potential!

keep practicing, i'll always give you an honest review if need be.